The latest of many pleas for help: "Dark"

I finally finished a typed draft of "Dark," my eight-minute non-dialogue script for our film production class. I turn it in on Thursday at 5:oo PM (PST), so any critique you could give me before then would be wildly helpful. My script will go into competition with 50 other scripts to be one of the eight films produced this semester, and I'd like to give my script the best chance it could possibly have. If you have a moment, please: go and review the script. I welcome all criticism, helpful or not - even something as banal as "I didn't like it." Or, conversely (and preferably), "I liked it." I just want some reaction to work with.

The first copy of "Dark"